Here is a thought... maybe you should incorporate more multimedia into your published articles because it took me a very long time to find an article with multimedia in it. The article I choose to analyze was Holiday fliers told to expect long lines. The article was published Nov.12, 2007, so it is a fairly outdated article. I believe the lede was well written, but it was 36 words long, over the '35 words or less' rule. I hope you told your editor about that one! I feel the article was in general well written, however, I would have never read to the bottom if it wasn't for a class assignment. The seventh paragraph could have used some rewording,"But - as usual - all it will take is some bad weather to seriously gum up commercial aviation traffic." I probably could have came up with a better choice of words than "seriously gum up." I really can't tell if this was a bad quote or just bad wording?
The media incorporated in the article was a picture taken by Mike Derer. The picture did a good job of supporting the article even though it was a year older than the article. It showed long lines at the airport and showed a lot of diversity in the people. There was even a mother tending to her child.
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